Lions, Tigers, And Bears! Oh My (Ryan's Critiques)

[Cael Seran]

Alright so this is the critique page is for all of my characters as I'm not cool enough to make one for everybody and they'll have to be bunched up but I would appreciate whatever critiques you give me discussions and plots are cool too. <3

Alistair Warden


Cael Seran


Michael Cypren

[Aryanna Katashi]

Okay, since you commented on two of mine, though I must say your comment on Kev's doesn't really count. >.> I figure I might as well do the same for you. So......

Alistair-- I like him. I mean, I am still trying to figure out exactly what to make of him, but then, I find myself constantly doing that with your characters. But with him, its a matter of trying to figure out what drives him. I understand his reasoning for the most part, hard for me not to, I mean, I play a character who's methods may not always come across as the most logical but ultimately they make sense, so for me, he is much the same. There is a method to his madness, or so I like to think and I find it interesting to see how he will handle a situation from moment to moment. Also, the fact that you take his status as a "little person" and incorporate it so well into how you RP him constantly amazes me. I have been around RP for awhile and though I have seen other "little people" RPed, it was not under the same context in which you are representing him and for me that is really cool to see.

For now though, that is all I can really offer on him, other than the fact that the little fucker makes me have to think and sometimes I find my head hurting trying to correctly come up with a response to him. I am rather known for my ability to read a post and reply within a few minutes, but with Alistair I find that I constantly have to sit back and think for a good while before I can reply.

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Cael-- First off, and just so I can get this out of the way.....OMG he is fucking hawt! Not that you don't already know this, but yeah, I just felt the need to clarify my viewpoint on the matter. But, with that out of the way, I have to say that out of all three of your characters he is shaping up to be my favorite. Perhaps it is because I love Gabriel so much as a character and see a lot of him in Cael, but I think that it is more to do with the little flares in his personality that make him different from Gabriel all together. I think a lot of people might look at him and see nothing but the similarities, but I see many distinct difference, and those are the things that draw me to him as a character.

I find his threads interesting and in his own subtle way he makes me laugh time and time again, probably not what you are intending to happen, but what happens none the less. I love that on the surface, he seems very one dimensional and yet there are key points to his thoughts or things he says that give a glimpse of the kind of depth that really lurks below the surface.

Now, I know that a lot of what I think of him (as well as your other characters) comes from me knowing you so well and knowing a good deal about how your mind works when it comes to your guys...I mean, not only have I RPed with you a lot, but you constantly tell me what you are striving for with them, so I have a bit of insight that others might lack.

But speaking from a strictly non bias point of view, in which I base everything off of what I have read of him so far, I see potential for a very well thought out, very interesting character. The only problem I have thus far is that there have not been enough small glimpses into who he really is as a person to allow me to base a full opinion on. But, I am sure, just like you always do, you will surprise me with it in a very Ryan-like sort of way. ( Felt it only fair since you turned my name into an adjective, that I do the same <3 )

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Michael-- I really don't know what to make of him yet. I mean, I have read several things with him, and I have RPed with him, but at the same time, he seems to have a bit of spastic personality. Which I am sure is your intent, but it just makes it hard to get a read on what to really make of him. So, for now, with him at least, I am going to reserve an actual critique until I see a bit more that gives me insight into who he really is, or at least a small glimpse of it.

[yoyongi]

Michael is, by far, my favorite of your characters. You don't do much with him, but I think that makes his social awkwardness that much better when he is around. You play him fantastic, I think.

That's all I have for now, though, I think. Great job buddy.